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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 7

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating. better-wewriwa

I am continuing to share parts of Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. I still don’t have a blurb;). My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy. I just realised I never mentioned the second Vampire who gets thrown into the equation and tries to find his place with these two. I will try and show Jayden soon. I may have to change his name as it’s pretty close to Sydney.

Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is a little after last week’s. We are back in Sydney’s point of view. Miguel has just brought them food and water to clean themselves. He is being his usual charming self, meaning he is driving Sydney crazy because she can’t get a read on him. Marissa, the human kidnapped at the same time as Sydney, speaks first.

“With a short nod he left the room. Sydney gritted her teeth, attempting not to notice his sleek movements.

“It is a shame he is the most dangerous man I have ever met. If he lightened up he’d be prime man candy.”

Sydney whirled to Marissa, gaping.

The young woman continued to wipe her face and raised her brows as if challenging Sydney to dispute her words.

Sydney couldn’t and instead burst into laughter. “I want to disagree, just out of principle, but you are right.”

Tangled Redemption is in my editor’s queue;). At the moment Marissa is chomping at the bit and demanding her own story. Unfortunately she has not been in a sharing mood, so I am still working on my outline.

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 5

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating. better-wewriwa

I am continuing to share parts of my WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. I don’t have a blurb yet, but I will try and give you some context. My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy.

Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is a little after last week’s. Sydney has defended herself successfully against the Feral attack. Despite the untenable situation she is drawn to Miguel Calatrave, the Vampire responsible for her kidnapping. She doesn’t know what to make of him. The scene is in Miguel’s point of view.

“Miguel scrutinized the Naema before him. After five years with the Ferals, four as Nasir Zwelenki’s second in command, nothing touched him any longer. But watching Sydney Radnall, a high-born Naema who should be worrying about her next society function and what to wear to it, defend herself against Feral Vampires with no hesitation had been impressive.

A part of himself he hadn’t seen or felt in years was glad she’d had the strength to kill. It would make everyone on the ship hesitate not just because he had given the order, but also because the news she’d killed would spread through the crew like wildfire.

And it had captured his attention.

He had done his best not to find her when Nasir’s orders came down, but when she’d made the stupid decision to travel to Dahir, a planet close to the central core of the system, without any protection one of her watchers had contacted Miguel and Nasir in the same communication.

His position was too important to risk going against Nasir. Miguel would do his best to keep the intriguing Honorable Radnall safe, but there were bigger things at stake.”

This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome.

Tangled Redemption is with my critique partner. This means I am jumping between delighted glee and utter terror that she hates every word…so basically the usual state for a writer;). While I’m waiting for her feedback I am outlining a three novella series that follows the events of my steampunk Christmas story Dirigibles Are Forever, coming from Loose Id in December. This is a long weekend in Canada and I have just discovered that there will be a Sharknado double bill on Monday. I know what I’ll be doing.

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 4

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating. better-wewriwa

I am continuing to share the opening of my WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. It is not yet finished and has not been polished;). I don’t have a blurb yet either, but I will try and give you some context. My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy.

Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is a little after last week’s. Sydney had been attacked by three Ferals. She managed to take out one and Miguel Calatrave, her kidnapper, took out a second. When she tells him she will not allow anyone to drink her blood, he challenges her to ensure her reputation stops more attacks. There is still one more Feral she has to face…

“Her chest tightened and she looked back into Calatrave’s jet-black eyes; his expression was impassive, but something in his eyes gave her strength.

The first one had been self-defense.

The next one had to be an execution.

She had killed once before.

A traitor to their country and their planet.

A traitor to their species.

A traitor to her.

Her husband.”

This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome.

The first draft of Tangled Redemption is done (happy dance), but it’s a bit of a mess. I am working through and am hoping I will get it in good enough shape to send to my critique partner tonight. I will do my best to get to everyone before the marathon starts;).

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 3

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

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I am continuing to share the opening of my WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. It is not yet finished and has not been polished;). I don’t have a blurb yet either, but I will try and give you some context.

My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy. Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is immediately after last week’s. Sydney has just killed a Feral and faces two more when the man responsible for her kidnapping walks in.

“He appeared to grasp the situation with one look and grabbed the nearest Feral, killing him with a quick twist of that neck. The third attacker froze, his beady eyes jumping between her and Tall, Dark and Dangerous.

Sydney took a couple of steps back to give herself more room. She would fight to the bitter end.

“Honorable Radnall, what are you planning to do?” He was taller than her, something that didn’t happen that often. His skin was darkly tanned and his black eyes gave nothing away. With every movement, every inch of his muscular body, he showed her he was a warrior.

She had trained with men like him, had been taught by them, but she had never managed to best even one of them.”

This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome. I will be in the writing cage all day as I am hoping to finish the first draft today, so I won’t come around until later in the day.

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 2

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

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Today I am sharing the opening of my current WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. It is not yet finished and has not been polished;). I don’t have a blurb yet either, but I will try and give you some context.

My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy. Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is immediately after last week’s and from the opening paragraphs of the story. Sydney faces three Ferals who are not about to invite her for tea and she smiled at them…In order to give you the whole snippet I had to use creative punctuation.

The lead Feral’s gaze narrowed.

She didn’t give him a chance to respond, but leaped and rammed her knee into his groin. He folded over with a whimper; she grabbed a hunk of his hair and slammed the bottom of her palm into his nose. Cartilage crunched as she jammed the shattered bones into his brain.

Eyes wide he dropped to the floor; dead.

Sydney panted; her hand found the cold synth-metal wall of the spaceship for a second, before straightening again. She stopped herself from rubbing her sore hand; the other two Ferals gaped at her. She wanted to smirk, but she’d lost the advantage of surprise-they recovered and converged on her; before they had even taken one step the door slid open and Tall, Dark and Dangerous, the man—no, the Vampire—responsible for her kidnapping, strode in.”

This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome.

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 1

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

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Today I am sharing the opening of my current WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. It is not yet finished and has not been polished;). I don’t have a blurb yet either, but I will try and give you some context.

My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy. Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

When the Feral Vampire strode up to her, a malicious grin curving his thin lips, fangs glistening, Sydney Radnall knew she would never again allow anyone to take her blood. She would die first.

There were three of them. The other two stayed slightly behind, fanning out and blocking the entrance, which was programmed to only open from the outside.

Marissa, the young human that had been taken from Parvati at the same time as Sydney, stood at her side. Their shoulders bumped, Marissa’s shaking, but she raised her fists as if to fend off the three Vampires with her bare hands.

No way in fucking hell.

Sydney straightened her shoulders, rolled her neck and took a step forward; she smiled.”

I am looking forward to hearing your comments. I am making reasonable progress with the writing, although it took me nearly four days to finish this major scene I have been working on. I hope my American friends had a great long weekend.

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!

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Sneak Peek Sunday-24/03/13

Here is my Sneak Peak for this Sunday. Check out the other fabulous Sneak Peeks here.

This is an snippet from Tangled Hunger.

“Something tickled the outside of her left wing. She shook it but the tickle didn’t go away. She looked over her shoulder and saw the Vampire gently, teasingly stroke along her feathers. Tanasha was just about to shake them again when she caught the look in his eyes.

Eyes that had taken on the now familiar silver tint.

But not with anger.

“What are you doing?” She had to clear her throat a couple of times before she could actually form a sentence. Having him stroke her outer wing feathers had the same impact on her as his caressing her breast would. The closer to the center of the wings the touch went, the more sensitive they became.

He didn’t look at her but focused solely on her wings. Duncan ruffled the feathers, going against the grain only to stroke them back down.

Her heart skipped a beat and her simmering arousal sprang to life full force. She grew wet. Jade, did he have any idea what he did to her?”

Have a great week!