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I’m continuing with my WIP Blindsided. This is a few paragraphs after the last snippet in which Ana admired Jace’s form when he came to pick up the dog (I’m changing the name, but haven’t reached that point in the revisions, so for now he’s still Reacher).
Ana is the fiction buyer for a major (made up;) book retailer and suggests a couple of books (she has copies the publishers shared with her) to Jace based on the choice he made for his dog’s name. Reacher joins them when he hears Jace’s voice. We’re still in Ana’s point of view.
For a moment they both just stood there looking at each other. Ana searched for something intelligent and captivating to say, something that would extend their time together, but, as usual in these moments, her mind was utterly blank.
He cleared his throat and lifted the books. “Thanks for the reading material.”
“You’re welcome. Thank you for fixing my car.” She bent down to Reacher. “Thanks for the company.” Reacher wagged his tail and grinned from ear to ear. Ana laughed and shook her head.
What works, what doesn’t?
Tha last three weeks have been a bit insane for me. I bought my very first condo! Everything is moving incredibly quickly (I have a two week closing date) so my brain is mostly mush and I’m feeling somewhat overwhelmed;). I now need to make decorating decisions and start packing as I’m moving by the end of next month. What?!? How the heck did that happen?!
Happy Sunday and have a fabulous week!
Aww, they’re both so sweet and awkward. I want to know who makes the first move. Congratulations on the new condo! I hope everything goes smoothly with the move.
I love this early-days hesitant awkwardness. Books are a great idea because they provide a later topic of conversation. Congrats on the condo!
Thanks, Christina. Ana loves to share books with people and the books come in a little later;). Thank you for the good wishes.
Very sweet characters. The book makes a lovely touch. Congrats on the condo. I owned one many years ago, and I hope you love it as much as I did.
Thank you, Frank, both for the comment and the good wishes. I hope I’ll love it;).
I’m sure you will.
Terrific scene. You don’t need and shook her head at the end. She laughed and scratched the dog under his chin. Try that. Not wanting to let either of them go.
Happy move. Big change in your life!!!!!!!!
Great suggestion, thank you, Charmaine. And thank you for the good wishes. Definitely a big change;).
Congratulations on the condo! Loved the snippet, such a real life feel to the moment. I like these characters!
Thank you, Veronica!!
Smart girl…now he has reading material he will find necessary to return and discuss!! Great snippet. And congrats on the condo!
Thanks, J Rose. And she’ll have a reason to call and ask what he thought;). Thank you for the good wishes.
The dog works; personally, I don’t care about his name one way or another. Her speechlessness also works, because I think we’ve all felt that way at one time or another.
Lol, thank you, Ed.
I love using pets in scenes. Nicely done!
Thank you, Lashell.
Come on, think of something quickly, or she’s leaving.
Awkward moments, I can relate. Dogs are good pick-up wingmen : ) Good luck with the move. Hope it all goes smoothly!
Happy homemaking, Tina.
I get the feeling that Reacher is an accomplice in extending the contact. You have created a lovely mood
Thank you for the good wishes and the lovely comment, Kim.
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