Weekend Writing Warriors-New WIP Snippet 1

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After an insane amount of work and travelling I’ve finally reached a point where I can join the Warriors again! I missed you guys and can’t wait to read about what you’ve been up to.

My happy news is that FPWL, my steampunk companion novel to Dirigibles Are Forever, has been picked up by Loose Id. I’m neck-deep in my first round of edits. I’m looking forward to sharing the finished story with the world. Because of the long break I’ve decided to share a brand new project with you. It doesn’t have a title yet and no blurb. I also have no idea if it’ll ever see the light of day. It’s something completely different for me. So far I’m enjoying the writing.

“Jace Deegan looked up from the fan belt he was installing as he heard a car drive into his forecourt. Beside him Reacher wagged his tail and jumped to his feet. A top of the line luxury SUV, about as exciting as an extended golf tournament, pulled up. The driver’s long black hair made him think soccer mom with misaligned tires due to hitting speed bumps too fast. He waved Reacher to wait and walked out onto the forecourt.

She came to a stop and climbed out.

His back straightened as soon as she came fully into view. He stopped rubbing his greasy hands and tension mirroring hers invaded his body. She slammed her door so sharply he flinched and had to remind himself he was no longer in Afghanistan and that in this area of Chicago gun shots were the exception and not the norm.

She marched toward him, frustration rolling off her in waves.”

What works, what doesn’t? Is the opening compelling enough for you to continue reading?

The snippet is pretty raw. I’m trying Candace Haven’s Fast Draft technique, which means no editing until the book is done. We’ll see how long I can keep it up;).

Have a wonderful Sunday and Happy Writing!

 

 

 

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About Tina Christopher

Erotic Romance writer

Posted on June 21, 2015, in Dirigibles Are Forever, Weekend Writing Warrior, Writing and tagged , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 29 Comments.

  1. Good descriptions. I like how the door slamming reminds him of his days in Afghanistan. :D. I like that whole PTSD bit. Good snippet!

  2. Good opening enough for the reader to want more. Reacher is probably not a good name for the dog since jack Reacher is a well known character in a series.

  3. Welcome back- you were missed! Interesting snippet-sounds like conflict is imminent.

    Are you going to do Camp Nanowrimo in July? We’ve already started a cabin with some of the usual suspects. Let me know if you want to join and I’ll send you an invite!

    • Thanks, Christina. Oh, let me think about Camp NaNoWriMo. I’m away at RWA in New York for a week and have edits coming up, but love the idea of committing to a word count. When do you need to know by? Thanks!

  4. Welcome back, and congrats on the sale! You definitely hooked me into this story in a few short lines.

  5. I love his initial impression of what kind of person is behind the wheel! I also like the realistic reaction to the slamming of the door.

  6. chellecordero

    Congrats on the Loose ID deal!

    I really got pulled in when he flinched and was reminded of his days in battle. Very well done.

  7. I love how he pictures the woman in terms of her car. These sentences characterize him, as well as the woman.

  8. Congrats on sale. Good opening. Best of luck with writing whole book without going back and editing 🙂

  9. When a temper meets a trigger? I have a feeling the next couple of pages are going to be tense! 🙂

  10. As exciting as an extended golf tournament, huh? 🙂 From how upset she is, I doubt it’s something as simple as misaligned tires, though.

  11. Ooh, what’s up with her? Great descriptions and i was really in the scene as her car drove up! It’s great to be inside Jace’s head.

  12. Lots of characterization in such a short bit of writing. Great job!

  13. At the moment, I don’t know enough about the series to know if the parts are written well. Jace has a strong voice, and definitely some serious problems in his past he hasn’t fully recovered from. But it was enough to entice me to read further

  14. Hook, hook, and hooked! Outstanding job of making the reader wonder what the heck is going on. Nicely done, Tina!

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