Weekend Writing Warriors-Steampunk WIP Snippet 11
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I’m continuing to share from my current work in progress FPWL. It’s a companion novel to Dirigibles Are Forever and the beginning of a trilogy. I’ve had two characters walk onto the page and inform me they are the heroes in the next book, so I guess there will be three of them. Now I just need to figure out their stories and who their heroine is;).
This snippet is immediately after last week’s, which ended with Garrett taking Clara on a tour of the dirigible. They’s been flirting quite furiously;). We’re still in Garrett’s point of view and last week’s snippet ended with him saying “Let’s start with the basics and work ourselves up to the more advanced destinations.”
“She raised a brow at him. Fire heated her eyes, giving the grey a green shimmer. “Maybe I’m not interested in the boring basics. Maybe I want to go straight to the more advanced…destinations.”
The slight pause fanned the flames racing through him, raising his awareness to new heights. “Maybe I prefer a somewhat slower pace.” He opened the door on his left. “This is the dining room.”
What works, what doesn’t?
I have a plan for today! Get up early (that happened already;), make my rounds with the WeWriWa, go to my exercise class and then I will write the final 7 scenes in this book! Fingers crossed I can make it. Things always turn out longer than I plan, but hopefully I can at least get the bones on the page.
Have a wonderful Sunday and Happy Writing!
Posted on March 29, 2015, in Dirigibles Are Forever, Weekend Writing Warrior, Writing and tagged dirigibles, erotic, fun, james bond, jane bond, romance, sexy, steampunk, steamy, swashbuckling, wip. Bookmark the permalink. 21 Comments.
Dang. That escalated quickly….ROFL. She’s a bit of a sparky one, isn’t she? Love it!
One suggestion, the first sentence in the second paragraph I THINK has an extra word.
“The slight before pause fanned the flames racing through him” — I believe either “before” should be removed, or else the sentence should be reworded to better specify the pause before the phrase. However, I think just leaving it out would work better.
Thanks so much for sharing! 🙂
Thank you, Amalie. Great catch. I will remove “before”;).
Wow,she is so incredibly forward, but I guess he’s going to make her work for it. If the dining room is unoccupied, it could easily become an advanced . . . destination, with it’s convenient tables. 🙂 Love the chemistry between these two.
Lol, but they’re just talking about areas not open to the passengers. She’s just looking to see behind the veil;). Thank you.
<> Sure they are. Uh huh. Absolutely. No double entendre intended, I’m sure.
She’s direct. I wonder if the dining room will please her? Nice eight!
I like that he’s not going to be bowled over by her and I suspect she’ll like that too. Great job of continuing to ratchet up the tension.
You have a busy day ahead. Cheering you on your last 7 scenes. The flirting in this is perfect and makes me smile 🙂
Thank you, Michelle. The cheering is greatly appreciated;).
Aw, playing hard to get, is he? Love the dynamic between them:)
He is, just a little bit;). Thank you, Eleri.
I bet she has plenty of interesting destinations in mind. He’s holding his own, but I don’t think he will be able to keep control for long…
Very nice dance going on between them. Thank you!
Thank you, Denisea;).
She is forward and I got the feeling, no matter how attracted, he disapproved. Maybe he should clear his throat before showing her into the next room. Definitely a suggestive and intriguing snippet.
Oh, these two are GREAT together. But I’m looking forward to the more advanced destinations LOL. Excellent excerpt!
Thanks, Veronica. I hope the wedding was lovely.
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