Weekend Writing Warriors-Steampunk WIP Snippet 10
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I’m continuing to share from my current work in progress FPWL. It’s a companion novel to Dirigibles Are Forever and hopefully the beginning of a trilogy. This snippet is immediately after last week’s, which ended with Garrett commenting on her need to see everything with “I’m unsure if everything is quite appropriate.” We are still in Garrett’s point of view.
“Her smiled deepened and the spark inside her grey eyes raised his body heat. “You let me worry about what is appropriate.”
Garrett studied her for a moment and then offered her his arm. “As you wish.”
Clara muttered under her breath. He didn’t catch every word, but for a moment he thought he’d heard “You have no idea what I wish for.”
He grinned and led her along passenger corridor. “Let’s start with the basics and work ourselves up to the more advanced destinations.”
What works, what doesn’t?
Thank you for all the great suggestions last week:). I’ve started to work out on Sunday mornings, so I’ll be around a little later. I’m loving the fact that Toronto has had moments of weather above freezing. I’m still wearing my big coat, but I’m hoping it won’t be necessary soon. Happy first spring weekend!
Have a wonderful Sunday and Happy Writing!
Posted on March 22, 2015, in Dirigibles Are Forever, Weekend Writing Warrior, Writing and tagged dirigibles, erotic, fun, james bond, jane bond, romance, sexy, steampunk, steamy, swashbuckling, wip. Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.
‘led her along the passenger corridor’-You left out the. Sexual innuendos and then they walk? I’m not sure if this fits. Always remember, it’s your book so I could be all wrong. You know I so enjoy your writing, Tina.
Good point, Charmaine. I’ll make a note and have another look in revisions. Thank you.
The low simmering tension between them is great. Hooks you right into the story.
Thank you, Eleri;).
I love their whole flirtation and the subtle wicked comments between them
Thank you, Michelle;).
I know I’d like to see the more advanced destinations!
Lol, thank you, Cara;).
I think their polite, innuendo-laden conversation works perfectly. A stroll at this point seems quite natural. That’s one thing I love about historicals, restraint and decorum help build tension and anticipation!
Thanks, Alexis. I think I need to make it clearer that he’s taking her on a tour of the dirigible. Hopefully then their walk will make more sense.
Oh, yes, let’s! 😀
Their banter continues awesome, Tina—I can’t wait to see if they work together as seamlessly.
We will find out at some point…once I’ve written that part;).
Would she really say that out loud though? Maybe if she was turned away, looking at something? I’m enjoying the scene and the tension between them, can’t wait for the combustion, as it were. Best wishes, great snippet!
Haha. I love how snarky she is. Should be a fun tour!
I’m enjoying their relationship and the smoldering chemistry between them!
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