Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 10
Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.
I am continuing to share parts of Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. I still don’t have a blurb;). We first meet Sydney in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. She ends up kidnapped by Miguel, a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy. And then there is Jayden. His one mission is to take out the Big Bad, but now he has to balance her life with his job.
Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.
In last week’s snippet we met Jayden for the first time. We are in his point of view. He is currently watching Sydney face off with the Big Bad, keeping himself ready to jump in-he has no idea how-to assist her if necessary. She just told Big Bad she left behind easy to follow instructions on how to continue her work dismantling his empire. Big Bad speaks first and you are seeing some creative punctuation;).
“His smile disappeared. “Don’t lie to me; you travelled to Parvati to investigate my connection to the human who supplied us with food. I am impressed; no one has ever come close to putting us together.” He shrugged. “But you left nothing behind because you didn’t trust your own judgment after your husband played you like a beginner’s tutorial for StarNet.
Jayden only saw the flinch because he watched her so closely. Going by Zwelenki’s satisfied smirk he’d also seen it. His good mood restored, he walked up to the Naema and circled her like she was a curiosity; Jayden prepared himself to respond at any moment.”
I am about half-way through the edits of Tangled Redemption and hope to finish them today. This may result in me making my rounds late in the day. Once the edits are done I have to move onto the one thing I dislike more than anything: write a blurb! Give me a synopsis any day;). I am thinking about bringing the Tangled Redemption snippets to an end. I can either continue, move on to Tangled Hunger (book 2 in the series) or share snippets from a steampunk project I love, but am unsure if it will ever see the light of day. Do you have a preference?
Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!
Posted on September 7, 2014, in Tangled Hunger, Tangled Indulgence, Tangled Redemption, Tangled Shadows, Weekend Writing Warrior, Writing and tagged angels, celestial surrender, dirigibles are forever, erotic, feedback, finding my way, galaxy, naema, sci-fi, series, sexy, sharknado, steamy, tangled hunger, tangled indulgence, tangled shadows, universe, vampires, work in progress, writing. Bookmark the permalink. 21 Comments.
Love the Star-Net comment! I also appreciate a snarky evil guy. 🙂
And I’ll do your blurbs (that sounded more suggestive than intended) if you’ll do my synopses. Ugh.
Lol, thank you, Sarah. I am glad he came across as I had intended.
For me there is just something about cramming a whole book into 180 blurb words…and suggestiveness is always welcome;).
Hot and evil. Terrific snippet. Oh what a world you’ve created.
Thank you, Charmaine.
Great tension and really solid characterization. (I don’t have a preference for which story you do next. Maybe the steampunk for a change of pace?:)
Thank you, Eleri!
That last line packs a punch! Great 8.
Thank you, Gemma.
Loved this line:..after your husband played you like a beginner’s tutorial for StarNet. Good luck with the edits and happy blurbing! 🙂
Thank you, Evelyn. It is one of my favourite lines as well;).
Love the tension, the flinch, Jayden ready to pounce. Makes for a great snippet. I hate writing blurbs too, especially the one sentence ones!
Thank you, Alexis. Yay, someone else who feels like this;).
Sounds like a bluff well and truly called – a tense and dangerous situation.
Thank you.
Your bad guy is a very Big Bad, which I love. I also like the way your heroine doesn’t give up or lose her cool (much) in the scene. Good luck with the blurbs, not my favorite thing to do either. Great snippet!
Thank you, Veronica;).
Love the tension you’ve built up here. Nicey nice!
Lol, thank you;).
Sharp writing.
Thank you, Catherine.
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