Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 5
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I am continuing to share parts of my WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. I don’t have a blurb yet, but I will try and give you some context. My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy.
Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.
This snippet is a little after last week’s. Sydney has defended herself successfully against the Feral attack. Despite the untenable situation she is drawn to Miguel Calatrave, the Vampire responsible for her kidnapping. She doesn’t know what to make of him. The scene is in Miguel’s point of view.
“Miguel scrutinized the Naema before him. After five years with the Ferals, four as Nasir Zwelenki’s second in command, nothing touched him any longer. But watching Sydney Radnall, a high-born Naema who should be worrying about her next society function and what to wear to it, defend herself against Feral Vampires with no hesitation had been impressive.
A part of himself he hadn’t seen or felt in years was glad she’d had the strength to kill. It would make everyone on the ship hesitate not just because he had given the order, but also because the news she’d killed would spread through the crew like wildfire.
And it had captured his attention.
He had done his best not to find her when Nasir’s orders came down, but when she’d made the stupid decision to travel to Dahir, a planet close to the central core of the system, without any protection one of her watchers had contacted Miguel and Nasir in the same communication.
His position was too important to risk going against Nasir. Miguel would do his best to keep the intriguing Honorable Radnall safe, but there were bigger things at stake.”
This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome.
Tangled Redemption is with my critique partner. This means I am jumping between delighted glee and utter terror that she hates every word…so basically the usual state for a writer;). While I’m waiting for her feedback I am outlining a three novella series that follows the events of my steampunk Christmas story Dirigibles Are Forever, coming from Loose Id in December. This is a long weekend in Canada and I have just discovered that there will be a Sharknado double bill on Monday. I know what I’ll be doing.
Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!
Posted on August 3, 2014, in blog, Tangled Redemption, Weekend Writing Warrior, Writing and tagged angels, celestial surrender, erotic, feedback, finding my way, galaxy, naema, sci-fi, series, sexy, sharknado, steamy, tangled hunger, tangled indulgence, tangled shadows, universe, vampires, work in progress, writing. Bookmark the permalink. 22 Comments.